Here is a story I'm am doing which probibly won't be updated very quickly. If there is any spelling mistakes please let me know so it won't happen in the future.
Enjoy
http://www.brickshelf.com/cgi-bin/gallery.cgi?f=504555Chapter 1
http://www.brickshelf.com/cgi-bin/gallery.cgi?f=505040Chapter 2
http://www.brickshelf.com/cgi-bin/gallery.cgi?f=527632Chapter 3
Purple Wolf
P.S. Just thoguht that I should point out that my insperation for this is Formendacil A.K.A my older brother.
Majistos Return
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Majistos Return
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"Trolls exist! They steal your socks but only the left ones whats with that?"
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"Trolls exist! They steal your socks but only the left ones whats with that?"
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Re: Majistos Return
this looks to be a interesting you've started here
the only spelling mistake I saw is that you spelled armor armer
the only spelling mistake I saw is that you spelled armor armer
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one for all! all for one! every man for him self!
one for all! all for one! every man for him self!
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Re: Majistos Return
Overall a very interesting little cartoon.
Errors I spotted:
P1 - It should say, "The world is uneasy. Someone is returning, someone powerful. He will come to take revenge on the one who defeated him, and put him in his prison for all eternity."
P2 - "I didn't think this would be possible. I thought he would be gone forever and never be able to return."
P3 - just need to correct spelling of "armer"
P4 - Page number 4 doesn't exist.
P5 - "The armor was meant to bring peace and freedom to the mortal world... He made it so it would destroy the world and then he would take control of it."
P6 - No corrections. Looks good!
P7 - "It's time to call the others!" (you should use "it's" instead of "its")
P8 - Look good.
P9 - "Go, my little friend. Find them and tell them that I am waiting for their arrival."
I hope that helps! I recommend typing your script in Word or some other program that has a spelling and grammar checking function. The grammar checker might not work perfectly for a comic strip format, but it should help you catch most of the "their vs. there" and "it's vs. its" mistakes.
Keep up the good work! Looking forward to seeing the next chapter!
Errors I spotted:
P1 - It should say, "The world is uneasy. Someone is returning, someone powerful. He will come to take revenge on the one who defeated him, and put him in his prison for all eternity."
P2 - "I didn't think this would be possible. I thought he would be gone forever and never be able to return."
P3 - just need to correct spelling of "armer"
P4 - Page number 4 doesn't exist.
P5 - "The armor was meant to bring peace and freedom to the mortal world... He made it so it would destroy the world and then he would take control of it."
P6 - No corrections. Looks good!
P7 - "It's time to call the others!" (you should use "it's" instead of "its")
P8 - Look good.
P9 - "Go, my little friend. Find them and tell them that I am waiting for their arrival."
I hope that helps! I recommend typing your script in Word or some other program that has a spelling and grammar checking function. The grammar checker might not work perfectly for a comic strip format, but it should help you catch most of the "their vs. there" and "it's vs. its" mistakes.
Keep up the good work! Looking forward to seeing the next chapter!
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Re: Majistos Return
Thank you for showing me my mistakes, it really help me know what I should avoid for the future parts of the story.AK_Brickster wrote:Overall a very interesting little cartoon.
Errors I spotted:
P1 - It should say, "The world is uneasy. Someone is returning, someone powerful. He will come to take revenge on the one who defeated him, and put him in his prison for all eternity."
P2 - "I didn't think this would be possible. I thought he would be gone forever and never be able to return."
P3 - just need to correct spelling of "armer"
P4 - Page number 4 doesn't exist.
P5 - "The armor was meant to bring peace and freedom to the mortal world... He made it so it would destroy the world and then he would take control of it."
P6 - No corrections. Looks good!
P7 - "It's time to call the others!" (you should use "it's" instead of "its")
P8 - Look good.
P9 - "Go, my little friend. Find them and tell them that I am waiting for their arrival."
For page four well when I was makeing it page four was origanaly there but I got ride of it and made it part or page 5.
Purple Wolf
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"Trolls exist! They steal your socks but only the left ones whats with that?"
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"Trolls exist! They steal your socks but only the left ones whats with that?"
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Re: Majistos Return
Here is chapter two.
http://www.brickshelf.com/cgi-bin/gallery.cgi?f=505040
Now please don't ask why there is pages 1-9 and then 91,92,93 its complicated.
Purple Wolf
http://www.brickshelf.com/cgi-bin/gallery.cgi?f=505040
Now please don't ask why there is pages 1-9 and then 91,92,93 its complicated.
Purple Wolf
There's always room for dessert.
brickshelf
"Trolls exist! They steal your socks but only the left ones whats with that?"
brickshelf
"Trolls exist! They steal your socks but only the left ones whats with that?"
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Re: Majistos Return
Well I've finally desided to not be lazy and continue it.
So heres chapter three http://www.brickshelf.com/cgi-bin/gallery.cgi?f=527632
Hopefully I will get more done to it threww the rest of the year.
Anyways enjoy.
Purple Wolf
So heres chapter three http://www.brickshelf.com/cgi-bin/gallery.cgi?f=527632
Hopefully I will get more done to it threww the rest of the year.
Anyways enjoy.
Purple Wolf
There's always room for dessert.
brickshelf
"Trolls exist! They steal your socks but only the left ones whats with that?"
brickshelf
"Trolls exist! They steal your socks but only the left ones whats with that?"